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Tuesday, March 20, 2012

Show Not Tell - due Wednesday, March 21st

http://www.brainpop.com/english/writing/shownottell/
Watch the above video. Create your own example of show not tell writing. Add a photograph which reflects your writing.

12 comments:

Kyle said...

It was a dark scary night and all the power went out in the houses along my street. The hard pellets of hail came down on my head as I walked down the alley towards my street. Once I got to the street, I realized a dark creepy figure's shadow coming towards me. As I tried to run away the figure got closer and closer until it was closed enough to grab me. The second the figure was about to grab me, I woke up from my bed and sat there for ten minutes thinking of what or who could have caused that dream.

Lindsay said...

When I walked out the front door a gentel breeze greeted me. It was summer you could tell by the smell of freshly cut grass and the humming of the bees.I could smell hamburgers on the grill. It was perfect. I saw little girls playing hopscotch and skipping. The pond was glistening and the fish were swimming all around. It was a perfect summer day.

Olivia said...

When I walked outside I was greeted by a crisp fall breeze.I heard the chirp of robins as they gently glided above my head.You can tell its fall once you step outside and see the beautiful birds and hear the sounds of nature. From a distance I saw kids running and playing. It was getting colder but the sun was still shining. It was a beautiful day.

Michael Bianchi said...

The dark night seemed to absorb everything that Henry could see. With rapid,brilliant and loud strikes of lightning, paired with the heavy splattering of rain on his roof Henry was helpless. His senses failed to adapt to the extreme condition, his eyes unable to see in the consuming darkness, the radiant blasts of lightning rendered his eyes useless, he would have to close them to avoid burning his eyes in the light. He could barely hear his two year old brother screaming and crying, even though they shared a room. Henry knew he had to somehow comfort his brother, but as he stood up to walk to his crib, a bright blast of lighting shook his house. Henry fell to the ground as another bolt hit the top of his house, this one more vigorous, it shook the whole house knocking over chairs and tables but most importantly, broke a gas line and started a fire in the basements heater. Henry was now with his brother, trying to stop his crying, but unaware of the fire that was burning below.

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Kove Once said...

It was a dark and stormy night on Moon avenue, the owls were hooting, and a faint howling of a wolf. It was in the middle of the summer but the moon had an eerie feeling. Under the moonlight, gusts of icy wind were blown around. Lightning started to rumble, as a flash of electric blue light flashed down moonlight avenue when all the street lights went out. It was a full moon last night and a dark ghost-like figue came into sight and everything went cold...

Rarereaper said...

The rain outside was loud and heavily falling. The sound of thunder filled my ears and Lightning flashed very brightly. My heirloom sword hung high above the fireplace. A roaring fire was undergoing the middle of its life. I was reading some of my novels and eating dinner. Just then the door opened and my friend came in and said. "Happy Birthday." He had remembered and he said "I brought you a present." He pulled a box out from behind him. Inside was a box of movies and video games. I thanked him and played one of the movies as my friend left. What a birthday this turned out to be.

Bianca Once said...

The sun was shining and a gentle breeze was blowing. I could hear the distant sound of birds chirping and singing, as they glided through the air. Down the street I could see little children playing and laughing, then people on bikes greeted me as they rode by. In the air I could smell the pleasant smell of food cooking on a grill. There were people splashing in the pool and having a great time.

luc once said...

it was a warm evening just as the manderine sun slowly went down over the mountine tops of the rockies. You stumble, but nothing is badly hurt so you continue up the mountine path to get your favourite strawberries. on the way you smell some flowers and see a bear sleeping in the remaining sunligh, so you slowly creep away. when you reach your strawberrie patch you find a ripe and juicy strawberrie and take a bite, your mouth waters at the deliciousness of the fruit and you can't help but get more.

That makle H once said...

I continued to walk... cautously as I made my way up the creeky old wooden stairs I heard faint footsteps and as they got closer I told myself it's just my imagination. The sound grew louder and louder... until I quickly turned around and...


...nothing. There was nothing there and I continued to walk to the bedroom and there it was! My kitty kat =D .

Kyle, The Guy with Correcy Spelling said...

Makle H, you spelled cautiously wrong

Kyle, The Guy who accidentally spelled correct wrong said...

Correct Spelling